Trying my hand at making a comics using the recents technologies.
I'm doing my best to learn and improve with each new page, but there will be rough edges (I hope that at least some people will be able enjoy the story).

缝了不少inax老师的作品

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I'd love to see more, first time experiments turning into more would be a sexy but cute story.

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Really good, please keep going

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一看就是inax喂出来的

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Im impressed, this looks very much like inax artstyle and im loving it

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要怎麼看是inax的作品呀？

How do you know it's inax style?

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This was AI generated ? Gosh darn, it's so good !
Feels like this technology is getting better by the day ! Please, do continue !

If I had to criticize, I'd say the typography could use a little work.
Also, Jack doesn't have his set of eyebrow horns on every panel.

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Thanks for the kind words grosbatard.
I appreciate this kind of constructive criticism!
I think the eyebrow horns should not appear in the future as I removed them on most recent pages,
for the typo should I go for something more cartoony/handwriten ?

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@nonimous
You're welcome :3
The Courier New font doesn't bother me at all, in fact I quite like it (it's a personal thing, really). Tho, maybe Tom could use a more cartoony font ? Idk, it's really only up to you.
No, what's drawing attention is :
1/ The font keeps changing. I've noticed that Tom talks in a font, and Jack in another. Which is fine, but sometimes this is simply not the case and they'll use the same font ; and then different fonts again. So if this was a deliberate choice if feels a bit all over the place...
2/ The inconsistency in whether or not characters use speech bubbles (phylacteries ?) at all. Sometimes they do, sometimes they don't and it's just ... there. I'm not sure there is a pattern to it, or maybe that's just how it was in the older pages (?). Like, Dormitory caretaker clearly doesn't, and at first I thought that was their thing, but no, other character do it to...

Now, please, do keep in mind that those are minor gripes and I wouldn't bother myself with such things unless I was aiming to broadly distribute my work.
I'm sure you'll find whatever fits best the style you're aiming for ;)
I very much want to see where this is going !!

PS:
I showed it to a friend and he said That kobold has external testicles Immersion ruined xD

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@nonimous

thank you

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@grosbatard
1/ Each character should have their own font, it's an oversight from me if it's not the case ^^'
After the chapter 2 I'll try to find a font that suits Tom better (maybe something more slender)
2/ Yea I see, I tryed a bunch of solutions to see what is the best and I think that I'll stick with outlined text

here is a realistic version of Jack, I hope your friend will like it =P
https://ouo.io/nPXFZ0

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@nonimous
1/ Oh, ok. Well then, if I may : p18 (fonts are inverted), p27 (Jack, bottom of the page) and p30 (Tom's name and last image) are the oversights I remember off the top of my head.
Cool :)
2/ It's your comic, whatever feels right is good.

Haha, thank you good sir. Will let him know x)
I'm hyped to see where this is going ;)

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