I think this is really awesome for a first try; the art is absolutely awesome and I didn't find any major issues with readability. Overall, a solid 4.5/5 from me, 5/5 on art and a 4/5 on story. That's judging based on the metric of a real light weight story, of course, but still. Good work!

Base +6, Voiderer +6, AhKai +5, gooblettes +6