RAW: http://e-hentai.fbk.tokyo/index/g/2181651/4ef922b6d1/

Chinese: http://e-hentai.fbk.tokyo/index/g/2141323/f559b59cc9/

Part 1: http://e-hentai.fbk.tokyo/index/g/2161731/4ac5b14f64/
Part 2: http://e-hentai.fbk.tokyo/index/g/1826624/d50e810d8b/
Part 3: http://e-hentai.fbk.tokyo/index/g/1904466/1d0dfb5b6e/
Part 4: http://e-hentai.fbk.tokyo/index/g/1844610/8c8939604c/

Thanks a lot to dual13 for commissioning this doujin!

Please proofread my dude.

every page: you often omit punctuation. most of your sentences are worded very weirdly
p.3 is obvious => it's obvious
p.3 now is time => it's time
p.4 is like => it's like
p.5 i'm the one doing this human...! => need to rephrase this
p.5 how in the world I'm => am I
p.7 no matter how much time has passed since you summoned me, you should do this, don't you think? => nonsensical. do what? the context also doesn't give the answer
p.7 you even keep that bad habit => past continuous. you even kept this bad habit of [...]

Last edited on 03 April 2022, 21:16.

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@cutegyaru

I fixed the typos you mentioned. Also, yeah, I was way too literal at some points, so I tried changing them to make them sound more natural.

About page 7: yeah, I forgot an "n't," so it didn't make sense. I apologize for that. But the original sentence doesn't include the information you are requiring either, that's why I left it ambiguous.

Anyway, don't forget this is a doujin. Most of what's written is meant to be read while jerking off. I mean, have you read the "high speed piston" part? That was hilarious xD

Thank you very much for your help.

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Pg. 5 has "amaizing" or something like it instead of just "amazing."

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@blavatskyproject
Thanks for the fixes.

This being porn is irrelevant and a cop-out used by a lot of people to skim on quality. You're also getting paid to translate, so the standards are quite a bit higher.

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@RabidTanker

*visible pain*

Thank you a lot.

@cutegyaru

I think I didn't explain myself well enough.

I'm not excusing the translation errors I may commit, nor the weird way to express things I use sometimes. The only thing I said is that there are some things that sound stupid in the original, so they would sound stupid in english. My work is transtaling this things, not fixing them.

My commisioners know exactly how my work sounds and looks. If they hire me, it's that I clearly meet their standards. I know my work is flawed, and I'll always accept constructive critics and fix suggestions. But the ones that have to decide if it's worth their money is them and only them.

And again, thank you very much for your help.

Last edited on 04 April 2022, 01:47.

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御坂！我的超人

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