Hello internet! Gingy here! First project. first upload! So do guide me along nicely~

If you guys like this, give a good rating or a comment! If i see another work i'm interested in, i might do it again~

Thank you all for giving this a read! Hope y'all have a good fap!

Stay healthy, stay safe!

~Gingy~

whoah there was her POV version?! neat

also oh shit she's actually a nympho now that we get to see her POV

edit:
@EvilSanta
oh it was a rewrite? damn man...

Last edited on 18 February 2022, 18:07.

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My goodness. The horny dam inside her broke and covered the world in pussy juice...

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This POV version is a trillion times better than the original.
Geez, that was intense, I need to take a nap...

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I'm gonna spill so much life energy over this doujin that yuuka might just materialize into this world.

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TBH I usually hate rewrites but POV's of the victims of NTR stuff is the quickest way to kill my boner, even if the art is stellar. So this rewirte frankly made this work readable/fappable for me. Kudos to you sir!

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You should add "Rewrite" in the title OP.

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You got the dedication though, 100 pages of rewrite is not easy.

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A rewrite that I actually... didn't mind at all lmao

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Error on page 82: "Sauro" instead of "Saruo"

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That was fucking amazing, please do more.

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Yeah, this is definitely a rewrite that somehow makes it feel MORE NTRy. In the original, the girl doesn't seem like such a raging nympho slut, she and the other dude are just dating like normal people at the end, and she had given the cuck many chances beforehand. She doesn't invite him at the end cuz like normal people don't cheat on their boyfriends. If you POV as the other guy, it's more or less a straight up vanilla(?) happy ending about shooting your shot.

In this one, with her getting pregnant and adding all the dialogue about turning into a nympho slut who doesn't seem to care who she's fucking, inviting the MC to run a train on her, plays much more like a normal NTR corrupted by dick story, so weirdly it feels like it has the opposite effect.

All that aside tho, top tier work. I mean I respect the dedication.

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This is one of those rare cases that the rewrite is better than the original xd

Good job man

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Oh god.................... that was amazing dude! I love it! You have NO IDEA how many times I think the same thing, I would like to rewrite entire CGs to make them dirtier and more passionate but I refrain, '' the basics of photoshop?'' Stop lying, It looks great!! I mean, it's kind of obvious in the end how you really turned her into a whore to your will and taste but I'm not complaining. GOOD JOB MAN!
Now I feel even happier to have done the translation and that someone had done a thing like this. I really love this community of horny monkeys xDDD.

Last edited on 19 February 2022, 07:55.

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@jameswilliams

Intended, Dark Lord Saruo is the bearer of the One Ring.

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Here, King, you dropped this...

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Hello internet! I'm so happy reading all the positivity from everyone! Warms me little heart~

Minor edits:
- Title now includes "[Rewrite]" (@EvilSanta)
- Goddamn "Sauro" has ceased to exist. I swear i typed Sauro so many damn times i was editing this (@jameswilliams)

And of course, the original Scan/Translator himself, @nkaR , has dropped by! Thank you so very much for your hard work on the original translation!

Feel free to share this around! Let more people enjoy Motsuaki's works!

Again, thank you everyone so much for the support!

Y'all have a great day ahead!

Stay healthy, stay safe!

~Gingy~

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This artists panels are a mess.

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Usually rewrites are shit, but this was even better than the original. Please considering doing more.

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Don't like this, prefer the guy's pov

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The rewrite is what makes it so awesome.
You can tell the passion dripping from the text, especially the intensity that's NEVER DROPPING ONCE during the full 3 days of humping.
I rarely read all the text of my quality reads, but here I went through every word with a mix of delight and "wow, what?", so props to you my dude.

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It's all good but you made the ending worse, it undermines everything else.

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Oh my. that was...intense?

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Good dialog dude but you bold way too many fucking words. I'd be much better if you did that 95% less.

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Dude this was FAR better than I expected. This is easily now my favorite version and wouldn't mind seeing other rewrites!

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Excellent work, great translation - Thank you for sharing it with the community

Waiting for new translations of other works from this great artist, which have not yet been translated

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