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The characters are all very unlikable

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@Quihen

Thanks for your comment, could you perhaps further elaborate what exactly is unlikeable? I was attempting to reflect real life people in real life situations.

Would you be willing to check out my other completed works to help me identify possible character portrayal issues I might have?

Here are two options if you have time,
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Periplekontas:
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Thank you.

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I could be wrong but i think @ Quihen maybe referring to the way the characters look . maybe they want them to look like normal people not muscled guys. but thats merely a guess.

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I just wasn't expecting the girl. That killed the vibe for me.

I just realized this is Sims. I need to do this myself! I just thought normal 3d.

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@Eyecy

Well firstly the top kind of looks like a serial killer/sociopath and acts like one too. All his dialogue feels very deadpan and his facial expression doesn't change enough. The fact he sleeps with a couple with no remorse and stays at their house as if it's his own only adds to the sociopathic feel.

Just from a story standpoint, the characters are unlikable too. It's subjective of course but the woman is clearly meant to not be liked so that's intended, but I feel as though you wanted the boyfriend to come off as sympathetic when really he just ends up coming off as an idiot for willingly letting himself be cucked.

You could argue that you wanted the characters to come off as realistic and real people are never perfect, but character flaws are a venue to make people empathize with your characters. I see you tried to do that with the boyfriend, but I don't feel endeared to his character. I feel as though you want to set up a slowly developing budding romance between the two men, but when a person is reading that kind of narrative they have to like the two men and want them to be together to invest. I don't feel that with these characters. If this was a story purely about sex and fucking for the sake of sex and fucking, the characters being unlikable wouldn't be so bad. From what I've read so far (up to the blowjob) the story is in this weird middle ground where it's not sure it wants to be a purely sex story or a romance.

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