Raw http://e-hentai.fbk.tokyo/index/g/1190730/c8b3cce406/

This isn't an exhaustive list by any means, there were too many errors to count and I couldn't be bothered re-wording everything.

@uploader if you are not a native English speaker, please consider getting someone to proof-read your translations before uploading. Or at least read through it to stop some of these basic spelling/grammar mistakes.

p4:
"The moment I call her" > "The moment I called her"
"She is good person but" > "She is a good person, but"
p5:
"I ask her about it..." > "I asked her about it..."
"and she tell me that ask you by help" > i'm not even sure how to fix this bubble, wtf
"So I've decided ask you made me the same!" > "So I've decided to ask you to make me the same" this bit doesn't really make sense either...
p7:
"Let's star by making you warmed up for it" > "Let's start by getting you warmed up for it."
"Cause you're new in this" > "'Cause you're new to this"
"went straight for it inteast of going slow?" > "went straight for it instead of going slow?"
p10:
"I'll show you how do it" > "I'll show you how to do it."
p12:
"Misaka-san did it all at the once" > "Misaka-san did it all at once" grammar issue here still
p13:
"It's so good but has so a vulgar taste" > "It's so good but has such a vulgar taste"
"Yeah, it feels good keep doing" > "Yeah, it feels good. Keep doing it/keep going"
p15:
"You overdid" > "You overdid it"
"Actually for this you need do everything" > "Actually for this, you need to do everything"
p17:
"Didn't I tell not all at once? This is so much" > "Didn't I say not all at once"....

Can't be bothered to go any further. There are too many mistakes.

Last edited on 16 December 2020, 23:11.

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The only thing this version has going for it is the scan quality. The actual translation is unreadable and looks like it was hacked together with MSPaint.

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It honestly felt like 2001 all over again with that kind of type setting

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> The only thing this version has going for it is the scan quality.

It's also using the resized files, not the originals.

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If you look really closely at everywhere this idiot put text, you'll see that the guy (0fficial, because he's being fucking edgy by putting a zero in his name instead of the letter o) used a beige brush to clean white bubbles. It's so fucking bad that you can even see it IN THE PREVIEW PICTURES! Also, this guy's scans are most likely not leveled and in RGB color, hence the beige discoloration that's pretty much everywhere. This guy's so fucking lazy that he can't be bothered to fully clean most of the bubbles, which by the way, is the easiest part of editing. You take a white brush and get rid of black text, and he fucked that up too!

I've seen plenty of horrible typesetting/editing on this website, but this one takes the fucking cake. Holy shit, I need to spray my eyes with Windex and scrub them with a Brillo pad to unsee what I just saw.

EDIT: @0 fficial Stop updating your fucking gallery just to bump it up on e-hentai without improving it. You clearly haven't fucking improved your work, so there's absolutely no fucking reason to replace your gallery. Your pile of hot garbage needs to fucking stay where it belongs: in a trash can.

Last edited on 19 December 2020, 02:09.

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It's so bad it must be the artist trolling us with engrish.

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Here's the actual translated work; http://e-hentai.fbk.tokyo/index/g/1002056/e4be729a18/
Seems like this one used better scans tho.

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Kongou Best Girl.

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Honestly this could be favorite in 10 years, but those 2 littles

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I don't even know how you fucked up this TL so badly. Thank God there's already a *real* Tl for this or I would be even more livid at the potential loss of a untranslated doujin getting a real Tl.

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i'm reading this in captain dickhead's voice (will from afar)

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