p. 10, himawari needs more practice (still has freckles & lacks byakugan), even early naruto could make a pretty convincing sasuke

p. 7 gahahaha mizukage gets sloppy seconds

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i think you have potential. just need more practice, like every other artists. keep marching!

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"You lost mind again? You must like it so hard!"

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Another shitty NTR wannabe artist.
People like this disgusting bitch is why people hate western hentai.

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Mediocre. It takes a special kind of suck to be worse than Tram Pararam and yet somehow this one managed it.

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"Are you satisfied titfuck?" I didn't know that titfucks are persons ;)

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You're really good, love your art hime.

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@Hinata-hime
Dude, page 9 is clearly NTR :/

Although you're clearly an amateur, you're very GOOD for an amateur, in my opinion.
However, UTC was completely correct about the NTR.

I'd suggest working on your art a bit more, and then working on your writing as well... Because while the art was decent, the writing was pretty bad (that can most likely be credited to you not being a native Engish speaker, but the point still stands).
I think you definitely have potential, but you could use a bit more practice, in my opinion.

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Shitty artist.

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@Chen Nyan
Thanks :)

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。Thanks :)

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Hinata-Himeeeee *hugs* x3
please more titty fuck pics of Hinata ^w^

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