So I had started rewriting this one, but then I realized that MC-kun and san are pretty boring... so I stopped. I'll finish it, because the original translation is a bit awkward, but the same can be said for a rewrite so... yeah.

UPDATE - I don't know why I posted this without finishing it. These are things you do when its 1:00 and your still awake...

Actual [Original] Translation - http://g.e-hentai/g/906668/0e90874e82/

Rewrites are shit. It's bascially bad fan fiction. If you got the skills to translate that you will be appricate but few like simply adding your own random story ontop of the translation. Any one reading this please petition to expunge. Let's get rid of this shit.

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Harsh, but I've already petitioned to have this gallery removed. Not for the reasons you've mentioned, but because I have no interest in continuing this particular project.

I've seen some rewrites on the site sure, a lot of them bad, but some good. I think the best ones are those that don't take themselves too seriously. I did that with the other rewrite I've made.

In any case, there's a tag for rewrites, and most of them have "rewrite" in the title. Just steer clear of them dude.

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