Translated by DesuDesu
Commissioned by DarthAlice
https://ouo.io/gxicYL

Really wonky.

The writing (not the translation) feels like it took too many notes from random hentais and forgot its own story scenario. (What did your children do to humans to deserve so much hatred? They probably kidnapped, brainwashed and transformed/corrupted people.)

The art is also hit or miss depending on how much the mosaics bother you. (#50-58, I know its supposed to be a bukkake scene, but don't put a dick/tentacle and the mosaic in the forefront of the picture. Thats where the reader naturally looks and will see first.)

Base +9, lolful64 +6, bobneil +6, jeren_sky +14, Techwire +11

I'm not following this plot. It seems like the TL wanted to fit in a lot of backstory but it just interupts the flow of the work. Gotta agree with imercenary, could be a lot better.

Base +7, EtherealSoul -5

@imercenary W-what if the monsters never did anything to humans in the first place and only chilled around in the cave, feasting on random animals nearby? Maybe the humans intruded their place and killed them in the first place?

@zztopjjjjjjj there's not much plot anyway.
1: Girl explore cave for treasure
2: Girl gets caught by caveboss
3: Girl gets corrupted by caveboss, turned into one of her kind
4: Girl corrupts her friend
5: They corrupt their former friends

Base +8, GuroLover12 -9, EtherealSoul +5

Sometimes it feels like the dialogue in Japanese hentai has become homogenized and stale.

Base +12, wavedash -16, jeren_sky +14, Scumlord -6

...."ear.......fuck".....I guess anything is a fetish now a days

Base +8, waterlas -9, NippleFire -10, Dsoul1150 -10

Only sometimes, Zeikfried?

Base +10, Scumlord +6

@mootxico

The last two scene outright states and shows that they left the cave to kidnap the two girls.

Its basically a, "ooh, -you- are bad"-beginning with a "lets corrupt everyone!"-ending.

Base +9

Here's a large ass stream-of-consciousness vomit:

Yeah...The writing isn't great...
When I first saw the RAWs, I noted that the expressions of the characters were perhaps a bit comical and over the top, but the execution of the genre was pretty pleasing. The CGs are definitely lovely without any story.

But when you can read the story?
Ugh.
The story AND the CGs, both of them are absurd. Both of them are over the top in terms of silliness, and it goes even beyond that -- it's not just silly (what the fuck is up with the swords analogies?), it doesn't really go anywhere with its narrative. They focus more on how much of a slut they are, rather focus on their transformation and utility.
Even the final page is just a gag. And I'm not being a dick here, it's literally just a dick-joke about the captain's "O face". How can anyone take seriously what happens to these girls, when it is distorted with silly humor? If you overly focus on how insane these girls are, you're losing the focus of the genre -- which is the utilization of human beings into someone's puppets, for their own agenda. The focus needs to emphasize that the plot doesn't happen just for shit and giggles. Corruption is inevitably about despair god damnit, and this is way too happy.

It's pretty darn hard to take the whole : "Ruin their lives and crush their souls" narrative seriously, when the girls essentially become hooter-girls, screaming from the top of their lungs while doing "V" signs: "WOOOO!! PAAARRTTYYY!!! SHEATHING SWORDS ARE THE BEST I CAN FEEL THE SLUTTINESS OVERPOWERING ME OH THE SLUTTINESS~"
Bimbofication is not quite like corruption, me thinks.

TLDR: Imagine a stereotypical sadistic-scenario. Now, imagine people being spanked not with a whip, but with a rubber-ducky -- while the mistress exclaims absurdly : "FEEL THE DUCKY! HUEHUE".
That's practically the writing in this story. If you mix excessive comedy with a genre that's about subtle cruelty, you're gonna have a bad time.

Base +5