Another Doujinshi saved from the retarded fuckstick. Keep being a total bro FieldsOfWeed.

And fix more of the morons shitlations, CGRascal for all of his faults? Can actually translate? And actually be understood?

Besides, it puts more butthurt on the retard when your work gets more favorites than his trashlations.

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Luke, it was Laruffi, not CGRascal. In light of those fucking retards, CGRascal is a shining beacon of english grammar and comprehensible speech. He actually seems to be improving in contrast to Laruffi "translations" which are getting worse every single time I see that cancerous crap.
Thanks for being bloody awesome Fields. Savior of the damned.
(I still believe those cockmonglers should be lined up against the wall and shot, or at the very least banned for stealing bounties and shitting on them.)

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reminder that fieldsofweed is literally our guy

i never joke

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Greatly appreciate the effort, but the editing is really lacking, it looks like you just did the bare minimum, putting words on a jpg. Leveling will not only make the art look much better, but also make the background under the white brush strokes you use to cover text actually white, and the background under the black blocks you use to cover text actually black. Also, your text positioning and shape could really use some attention.

That's just the really basic stuff. If you're going to continue doing this, I'd recommend going the whole nine yards and doing it well. Certainly better than the original translation, but there's still much room for improvement.

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>wavedash
Thanks for the input, I knew something felt off about some of the art. Hopefully I'll be able to catch those problems before they get uploaded, or at least run it by another editor to see if everything looks fine now that I know the problem.

As far as text positioning and shape go, I try to make sure that there is not an overabundance of space left in the bubbles/blocks after the words are put in, and try to find the font size that best fits it. Shape of the font is currently difficult to pin down, I only have the one font style that I have available to me, with little clue of where to find more suitable ones. The one area I feel that I do try my best in is size and space usage, as I find myself constantly trying to fine tune the font in some parts down to decimal point values. If you could be more specific on where the positioning and shape could use more attention, I'd appreciate the pointers.

>svaerje
The editing is not great. I've covered that point already and am trying to improve upon it. I have already admitted to not understanding Japanese, and have admitted to desiring that someone that does understand and has the knowledge/skill to do a quality translation of something I have 'fixed' to do so so I can try to take my own attempt at it down. And it is 'fixed' as the term because the alternative word 'edit' didn't quite fit it since I am not really a skilled editor, and 'paraphrase' is a mouthful and doesn't quite roll off as a term to give to something like this. And those mistakes were a slip up on my end, at the end of the day I can't really blame anyone but myself for that mishap, since this is currently done solo. I do this as an effort to try to give people something that isn't a complete clusterfuck, and given that the original TL of this has been up for nearly half a year with no sign of anyone deciding to try to make it better, I decided to go ahead and try my hand at improving it myself. At the end of the day, you still have the Laruffii translation to go read if you find this lacking.

Edit: And your entire comment says a lot about your attitude.

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fixed... ? the editing is as bad as the "original". and you clearly don't understand japanese, you just rephrased laruffi's lines into a more "hentai-ish porn-ish" english. you also added mistakes laruffi didn't do (irresistable > irresistible).

@FieldsOfWeed
i certainly appreciate the effort, don't get me wrong, but your fixed *translation* is as broken as the original one.
example: page 1, last panel: "let's teach her a lesson!" is totally an invention of laruffi.
"paraphrase" is perfectly fine to define this kind of works.

"At the end of the day, you still have the Laruffii translation to go read if you find this lacking."
i think this one tells a lot about your attitude.

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@ziom236, I can actually read CGrascals stuff, sort of. Not the case with Laruffi's.
But to say CGrascal has improved? He had years to improve, he hasn't at all, not one bit it looks like. Unfortunately.

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