I fall in love with a figure

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forever alone

Base +9, Person8 +10, SilverWolf765 -10

A couple of things; Firstly, the typesetting needs some work, you don't want to rely on hyphenating words as much, because that looks kinda sloppy. Secondly, Basically every touhou material ever has translated it as the "scarlet devil mansion" rather than the "red devil mansion". There's also a couple of places where you just didn't translate it at all, most notably the title (which is something that you really want to translate,so that people have some idea what they're getting into to). Lastly, the translation seems a little wooden. It doesn't seem to be machine translator weird, but you might want to get this edited before you post it. Practice will help with all of these.

Base +8, saegrimr +8, Watsa +4, somethingperson +3

@LlamaKid

Thanks for your suggestion

But for Yohane's work, its title is always very subtle, and might contain some highly traditional linguistic expressions of the Japanese culture itself...Therefore, it is very hard to get it translated properly.

So here on g.e-hentai, others who translate Yohane's work will also omit the title. And not for the jap->eng translators, even the Chinese translators, though their language and culture so close to Japan, their version of translation of Yohane's work also usually omit the title...

P.S. And in fact I did translate the title of this doujinshi, but I am not quite good at PS, so I just didn't place it on the cover...

Base +9, somethingperson +3

Shanghai is alive?

Base +8

That Marisa at the bed is too damn adorable.

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@Bigbigfool
Well-well. This doujin is very good, so... Maybe you need some help with editing? I know couple of guys who can help you with basically everything from translation check and to the typeset.

Base +18, lesher +14

Yohane at its best. Thank you uploader!

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Marisa x Shanghai? I... am strangely okay with this.

Base +9, lesher +14, silver012110 +8, Watsa +4, Auir +10, somethingperson +4

Pretty good, but i have seen better from the artist.

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Thank you for your efforts translator.

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