This was actually a pretty good translation job. I'm impressed. The one thing that kept bothering my reading was to see a lot of cutoff and hyphenated words. The third panel on page 03 is a particularly egregious example:

"I'm ol-
der, ex-
perienced
and stu-
died va-
rious things."

That type of formatting really messes with the flow. Keeping the words intact makes things a lot easier on the eyes. Besides that keep up the good work.

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Every Touhou NTR "plot". Touhou gets Raped "I don't care anymore" the end. A+++++ right there. Leave NTR out of touhou it makes even less sense than the artist inserting random guys into touhou fanon.

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Amazing how much better this book would be without that last page.

@sv24: Har har. I mean 23.

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@Zakuzelo Yeah you mean page 24? I can't understand it aswell, it's in japanese afterall.

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hell yeah, we need more Keine-sensei works...
she really deserved more love than what she gets until now!!!

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Dude got the luckiest five seconds of his life on page 7. I mean, goddamn.

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I only have a passing language skill in Japanese, but shouldn't it be "Ookiku Nattara"?

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as much i would like that keine would end up with mokou it ultimately wouldn't work because mokou is immortal and if they did get married one day keine will die which mokou would have to watch so it would be heartbreaking for her so its better off if keine is married to someone else and spends the rest of her life with him/her then with mokou so this is better for everyone i wouldn't be surprised if mokou met this guy and let him have keine as she knows the horrible truth keine is not immortal so i don't see this as cheating

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