my First FINISHED H-comic i'm kind of proud of it there WILL be a vol. 2 and more

Apparently the site doesn't have tags for MS Paint or Shitty Art. Sorry.

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Yeah, no...

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There's something odd about this album, the thumbnails are of fairly good quality but the increased size version is of undeniably bad quality. You may consider re-uploading.

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Umm...It's not horrible. But it's difficult to read, and the art is...kinda sloppy.

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It's not to bad I guess, but it really needs cleaning up. Removing the white edges around most lines, using actual text and fonts instead of drawing words on, improving motion blur lines, less jagged edges, using straight line tools for the panel/ border lines etc. The basic stuff. It's ok... for a first attempt.

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I feel inclined to agree that you have a lot of room to grow, but it's a good start!

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Every one starts some where and for anyone there is always room for improvement and also KEEP UP THE HARD WORK AND DON"T GET DISCOURAGE!

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>my First FINISHED H-manga

Manga, eh? Then why is this labeled Western and not Manga? Oh, that's right, it's because you made a comic.

This really cuts into the heart of your art problem doesn't it? You're a weeaboo.

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Room for improvement?

number 1: NEVER USE MS PAINT.

number 2: Get a Tablet. Seriously.

number 3: Clean up the art and use less vibrant colors. It actually bothered my eyes with how bright the colors were.

Finally: you made a COMIC, not a H-Manga. Saying you made a Manga makes you sound like a complete weeaboo in every sense of the word. You are not Japanese. Imitating the art style won't change that. Create your own style and maybe someday you'll have the respect of the community.

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someday guys... i will laugh my ass off at your comments in retrospective

XD you don't know HOW MUCH he improves since this , even with and without my help as well

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