Page 9: "Look at this mess I've made" was probably meant to be "Look at this mess you've made"
Page 15: "I can reach it" doesnt sound right. I guess this was about his penis reaching her spots?
Page 19 "While I'm rubbing my belly" was probably "While you're rubbing my belly" and I guess "dont poke me" was an euphemism for thrusting his cock into her, should be changed to something that makes sense in the conversation
Page 20: "I was just overwhelmed" sounds very weird in this context and there is one "Lapi" instead of "Rapi"

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@Tarlfgar "mess" is correct: "a disordered, untidy, offensive, or unpleasant state or condition".

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Untagged machine translation.

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@Briareos Kerensky I was not saying "mess" incorrect. Im saying that in that sentence "I" is incorrect and "you" is correct

@ozuuma123 funny how a normal user cant even add the "rough translation" tag

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http://e-hentai.fbk.tokyo/index/g/3010764/04c52afd05/ raw/original

thanks for the effort

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@Tarlfgar I think he got confused because in your correction for page 9 you misspelled "mess" as "mass".

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had a stroke reading this

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This reeks of MTL...

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