003 OG: どっちのオスになりたいの? TL: "Do you want a male?" ED: she's talking to the boy (so she isn't asking if he wants a male)
OG: もちろん私よね TL: "Because I do" ED: she's suggesting herself as his mate of choice
OG: 私はいつでも準備できてますよ TL: "I'm always ready for one" ED: you make it seem like the girls are talking to each other when they're not
004 OG: ぼくクンは / 誰にも上げないっ TL: "Boku-kun..." / "Won't give it to anyone" ED: she's speaking her own thoughts here, she's not talking about what Boku-kun will or won't do
OG: わたしだけのオスになりたいよね♥ TL: "You want to be my own male..." ED: missing detail, she's suggesting he wants to be exclusive
006 OG: 私のオスになるまでっ、 TL: "...And will do it until you became my male!!" ED: this is connected to the line afterwards but you're connecting it to the line before it instead