She does knows how to take advantage of the situation to...

Raw: http://dl.hentaiknight.work/?l=e-hentai/mpv/1652844/9778d9b208/#page22

003 "shake you hip more"
005 "you are absentmind for along time"
005 "I haven't involved with them recently"
006 "I've just have sex with him a while ago"
006 "I can feeling that"
007 "you come again. how many time did you cum?"
008 "how many time you can cum"
010 "shortly those delinquents started to call me out whenever he like"
011 "I want put it in"
013 "it is for today main guest"

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@ rsx205 Thank you, but frankly it is useless to point out the errors if you do not propose corrections, that won't help us. Neither me nor the translator speaks good English, but we did our best.

For me, as long as you understand the story it's good. I will never thank enough a translator.

Okay, We got a lot of obnoxious people out here! well, have fun.

Last edited on 22 March 2023, 19:42.

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please translate more Mon-mon comic, love you!

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@kanancu7 I will try, Thank you, friend :)

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@baha815 calling this "your best" without having fluent speakers proofread your work only shames yourselves with the shoddy work.

Edit:
No, you don't owe me anything.
But you do owe yourself not to make an ass out of yourself in public by insulting people and calling a rough translation "doing your best".

Edit2:
You've already posted the gallery. There's no reason for me to do your proofing and editing work for you.

Last edited on 23 March 2023, 00:19.

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@colossol That's all you do around here! complain. I owe you nothing dumb fuck.

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the shit is free why the fk are ppl always complaining about the grammar?

If you are so butt hurt about it go fix it yourself and upload it fking child.

@colossol <--- colossal asshole

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@baha815
Hi there, unlike the others I have time to lose, so let me help you.
I'm not a native English speaker either but I'll try to correct some of the mistakes you made and hopefully, I'll be corrected by others if I make any myself.

I shall pinpoint your mistakes with strikes and propose a correction with {}.

Page 03:
"You know what will happen if you broke the promise, do{don't} you?"
When you use this expression, you use the negative form when your sentence is positive and vice-versa.
Ex: "You (do) whisper in the lolis' ear, DON'T you?" "You HAVEN'T yet got caught by the FBI, HAVE you?"

"Shake you{your} hip{hips} more"

Page 04:
"What did I teach you when time about{you're about / it's time} to cum?"

Page 05:
"Haa I love dick{dicks}"
Something tells me she doesn't love just one dick, but dicks in general. Or she should have specified his, at least...

"Dick{s} feels{} good"
Same here, "Dicks feel good" / "Your dick feels good" make more sense to me. I might be wrong on this one, though.

"You are{were} absent-mind{ed} for along{a long} time"
When she finally responds, she's not distracted anymore, it's in the past. I prefer "You seemed to be distracted for a while / a moment"

"What's{} about those delinquents?"

"I haven't {been} involved with them recently"

"Maybe they are tired {of} bullying me..."
Yeah, sometimes you cannot make shortcut, though sentences like "Have you tried bullying me?" are grammatically correct. English can be weird.

Page 06:
"It's hard to believe I've{} just have{had} sex with him a while ago"

"AAH... I still can feeling{} that..."

"No... Don't think about that{it}..."
Just rings better imo.

Page 07:
"You come{came} again. How many time{s} did you cum?"
Alternative: "You're cumming again.{...}"

Page 08:
"Hey? Start to{} Shake{ing} your hip{s} again!"
When you grab your mom from behind, you need to use both hands because, thankfully, hips come in pairs.
Alternative: "Hey? Start shaking those hips again!"

"No, we want to see how many time{s} you can cum"

"AAH~ No more... I'm going to be{} insane{,} my head feels numb I can't think anymore"

Page 09:
"I can't endure {it} anymore! I'am{I am / I'm} going to put {it} in!"

"Hey! back to{wait for} your turn!"

"R...Right? Maybe I{I might have} got a cold?"
This one is tricky, "I got" when you got the cold in the past, "I've got" when you've just got it.
Ex: "I got a cold when I was sleeping out at night, escaping the FBI" "That loli might have got my cold hehe... AATCHOOoo"

Page 10:
"Shortly{recently}, those delinquents started to call me out whenever he{they} like{wanted}"

"I will be keep a lookout{I'll be on the lookout / I'll keep watch}"

"I lied to Satoshi that I am going to {a} women{woman's} club meeting"
Alternative: "I lied to Satoshi, I told him I went to a woman's club meeting"
Actually, I'm not so sure about this one...

"Even though {you're} saying those words, you are still begging for it"

"I wouldn't even{didn't} think Satoshi have{had} such a perverted mom"

Page 11:
You missed some japanese text. Happens to me every time.

"Aah... You are messing up so much... Ah"
"Messing up so much" means making a huge mistake
Ex: "I messed up so much when I came inside her!" "Indeed aniki, easy sample for the FBI. If they catch you, they'll mess you up too..."
You can use: "You're a mess!" / "You are making a mess! (out of yourself!)"

"Here are the dicks you are{were} waiting for, clean it{them}"
If there are many dicks, then you have to clean {them} all.

"Haa I want {to} put it in"
"Want" is always followed by "to" when conjugated.

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Page 13:
"It is for today{'s} main guest"

"If we are doing it as {a} group, it will be safe right?"

"Or would you rather to{} take off this mask and said 'It's mom!'"
Hi it's me, MO- I mean Mario!

Page 14:
"I will not say ANTHING{anything}"
I bet that's just a typo

"I have no choice but to fall to{for} this"

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Page 16: RAS

Fewww it took me more time than I thought it would.
Well, it may not be perfect, but it will definitely be better. It is always easier to come criticize the work of other, I myself, am trying to learn Japanese
and when I start translating into English, I make the same mistakes as you do sometimes. I'll release a translation in the coming days and I bet and somewhat hope I'll be roasted as much as you haha.
But that's how we learn.

Thank you for your work and, hopefully, I could help you get better.

Last edited on 22 March 2023, 23:14.

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@raizerXIII you seem to be taking this rather personally. Hiding something?

But I'll answer the question anyway: the way this site works, any translation usually precludes another translation. By posting a bad translation, baha815 has practically ensured that a good translation will never be posted. I'd fix it if I could but I can't. Nobody but baha815 can. This is why people are always complaining about bad translations.

I'm not at all butt-hurt, only saddened that people like yourself and baha815 don't take pride in their work.

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Here is the script if anyone wants to finish what our friend Vodsky started I will correct it after If not, well never mind.

https://ouo.io/HQL8b0

@colossol Even better you can edit and publish your version on the site if you want to. unless your pride stop you.

@raizerXIII LMAO

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@baha815
your pastebin may be private (or caught in the spam filter).

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