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WTF Devin ?

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not opposed to a properly tagged, passably edited rewrite like this by any means but "Devin" is a hilarious choice of name

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Honestly, I would too. Devin looking hot.

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Do you think god stays in heaven because he too lives in fear of what he's created?

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Came here just to look at the comments

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Nigga really needs to add his own name to self insert.

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What the FUCK is this shit?

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@godslave
Except this is a properly tagged rewrite, not a translation.

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English translation: http://e-hentai.fbk.tokyo/index/g/2136591/46066fc386/
Yuuka's version rewrite: http://e-hentai.fbk.tokyo/index/g/2146082/e3deeb85fe/

This is the SECOND rewrite of this work to FOLLOW the english translation.
Was there something about the original story that made a lot of readers hate it more than a typical NTR doujinshi?

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Devin.... lol

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I mean it's getting rated like 1 star, but I won't be cruel to it, the art is fucking hot, I can read it fine, the plot is good (still wish we could've seen the actual gender morph but that's just my taste) and plus it made me audibly laugh when he was rapidly saying "DEVIN DEVIN DEVIN DEVIN" over and over while wanking surrounded by sacks of cum for no apparent reason (why was he wearing condoms to jack off lmfao, funniest thing ever). You guys are just being harsh imo

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Who the fuck is devin?

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I would imagine the full color makes it more of a template, and the initial plot was some base NTR douijn.

but this is not an improvement in the writing. better to just leave it textless. Devin.

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First someone rewrites the perspective, now we rewrite to... genderbend?
I must really question the mental workings of whoever concocted this.

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i don't understand these comments, who can explaine?

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How is this real?

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devin is too powerful

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@assisted_vape
the problem people probably have is different but in my personal opinion in the original work its almost all from the perspective of the guy gettting NTR'd but different from most ntr is also almost full of his dialogue only. that is both unsexy and aggravating because I don't want to spend pages reading about some guy being a cuck. People who like NTR like the conquering of the women more than the cucking of the guy. So people re wrote it to be less focused on the cuck.

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who the fuck is Devin, did you fucking put your irl friend name?

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There are literal untranslated loli-epics by this artist, and some dude thought it would be a good idea to waste his and everyone's time by adding "Devin" to every mention of the girls name in this already translated doujin

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