The drawing are clean and nice. Body proportions are lacking a bit, but it's overall ok. However, the transitions are way too quick. There's no movement. And the dialogs are really poor, too artificial and cheesy. Nearphotison, you have potential. Your talent for drawing is good. And adding movements, the way you see in mangas, would be great and bring you to a new level. But what you're lacking the most is storytelling. It's going too fast and you build no momentum. Your four first pages should have been told in eight or ten pages, easily.
Bra: "I was thinking we could start with something..." [reaches around Pan from behind and starts undoing her buttons] Pan: "Why are you--" Bra: "Hang on, I'm going somewhere with this."
This is already the best GT loli comic because it basically is the only one. This is so hot I can't take it and Near already has Bra and Maron scissoring. I feel like things can only improve.
Base +6, Nearphotison +11, BlazinRoc +7, Bookrat15 -6, CocoaRobbins +6