RAW: http://e-hentai.fbk.tokyo/index/g/2232998/f1f333eac7/

Commissioned by: Anonymous

Translated by: HMC Translation
Cleaning/Typeset by: Anonymous

Website: https://ouo.io/TR09Yk (Profile)
E-mail: hmctranslate@gmail.com (Commission/Contact)
Discord: https://gplinks.co/35OwR (Commission/Contact)
Patreon: https://gplinks.co/0GC44 (Support)

My Other Translation:
http://dl.hentaiknight.work/?l=e-hentai/?f_search=hmc+translation

No sex only blowjob :/

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Some of your translation is extremely silly. Tip: stop trying to mimic Japanese sentences and expressions 1:1. It doesn't work, sounds unnatural and can actually lead to mistranslations. You're basically only doing this for money, so honestly I'd expect a lot better.

Also, your credits page has a typo in it. Like, come the fuck on, dude.

EDIT: I REALLY like kaedeko, so please hit me up if you want FREE proofreading. cutegyaru#6881

Examples:

Page 1
Your TL: Hey, won't you come?
JP text: なあいいだろ？
Author intent: Dude, it's a player trying to pick up a chick. Heavily implying they've been harassing her for a little while now. "Aw, c'mon! Just for a bit?"

Page 1
Your TL: HEY!
JP text: あ あの！
Author intent: As silly as this is, you're completely changing his character voice. You make him sound like a cocksure, assertive guy. He's not. He's literally saying "U-um!" or even "E-excuse me!"

Page 1
Your TL: Are you a justice man?
JP text: 正義マンか～？
Author intent: Yeah, this literal translation makes no sense. A justice man? He's basically asking if he's some kind of super hero. "What are ya? Justice Man?"

Page 1
Your TL: I'll play with you until your bones fall out.
JP text: 相手してあげるわよ 骨身に沁みる程ね
Author intent: Until his bones fall out lol? 骨身に染みる is a set expression, meaning to feel/strike to one's core.

Last edited on 29 August 2022, 06:25.

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Thanks for the commission and translation, pretty classic story but good art. Albeit a bit harsh, cutegyaru does make an accurate point and is doing some work for you with his examples. Overall, still very understandable. Taking the intricacies cutegyaru mentioned, you can get even better. Keep up the good work. :)

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Thanks for translation. There is new chapter released last week raw should be updated https://kaedeko.fanbox.cc/posts/4290591.

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Well, at least he was her first.

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after the build up, that went from0 to 100 really fast in the cheating sex scene, but the art is nice and the douchebag actually does has brain and brawl on his side, so, he is not that repulsive as the regular ones. Guess in future chapters the kendo sensei will take part in the action too

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The thought of a video of some kid drinking a beer going viral is so funny to me.

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Nice, thx for sharing!

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You got PAID for this garbage translation?

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@fake276 I certainly find it very hard to believe that it would be an issue in Japan of all places, with its huge drinking culture. Seems like a normal thing for friends and family to do.

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Why this one is so long to finish it?

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