114 onlythe 126 was be 129 exctreted 134 for of. also duplicate passage 138 armor of heart 139 have to more 144 establish[ed] 153, 155 right passage overflows 155 remove "over"
Page 84: I think you want a "to" before the "win". Page 94: Could use another comma. Page 100: "Recklessly". Page 108: "Screamed", consistent tense. Page 114: Missing space. Page 139: Missing the word "make". Page 144: "Established", consistent tense. Page 148: "Changed" is not the end of the sentence and using "Giselle's" is bad grammar too. Page 153, 155: The text spills out past the end of the image.