RAW: http://e-hentai.fbk.tokyo/index/g/2116113/071405b179/

Shamelessly copied comment from klermun:

Unfortunately you fell for the newbie trap and used the 1280x resolution resample pages for editing instead of the original raw which is around ~2400 x 3454. For gallery viewing, e-hentai downsamples all images to 1280x resolution so if you downloaded the pages without using the original source link, you got the reduced version instead.

Another possibility is that you downloaded the raw from one of the aggregator sites such as NH. These sites only copy galleries from e-hentai at resample quality and thus don't have the original resolution versions available. You shouldn't use these sites as a source for your raws.

Always check that you're using the original raw before you start editing. If you ever see the resolution being 1280x something, then most of the time that means something is wrong and you got the wrong version.

Here's some ways you can download the original full resolution version of any gallery on e-hentai:
1) Torrent download if a torrent is available. Avoid any torrents labeled 1280x though.
2) Click on Archive download and then Download Original Archive.
3) If you prefer to download one page at a time, make sure you download using the Download Original Source link located below each opened image in the gallery.

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Pretty well done for your first work, typesetting looks quite ok, translation is a bit rigid at times but nothing catastrophic. Some minor stuff:
- I don't think you need to capitalize the K in "kun".
- Not sure what you did but the image quality is noticeably lower compared to the raw.
- Pg. 10: gave "him" (Subaru).
- Pg. 13: "sees".
- Try to switch up the fonts a bit to distinguish Rem's lines from the guys' lines. Pg. 15 is really confusing to read since all the text boxes look similar.
- Some bubbles are cleaned up in pg 13 but nothing is edited in. You can leave them as is since they are just SFX and moans but try not to leave any empty bubbles.
- Also noticed this while checking pg 13 and it's pretty minor but if you want to be consistent with the raw, you can use white text with black stroke for the cock sucking sfx.
- Pg. 18 is missing.
- Jesus you even cleaned out the comments on the illustration pages. Just leave them in if you are lazy to translate those. Saves you time as well and people usually don't care about those pages much. Though it would be highly welcomed if you translate them as well.

All in all, it's pretty well done if that's your first attempt. Keep up the good work!

Last edited on 19 January 2022, 10:22.

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