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[Poncocchan] Osananajimi wa Ore no Senzoku Okuchi Maid | My Childhood Friend is my Personal Mouth Maid Chapter 1 (COMIC AUN 2020-10) [English] [Digital]

[ぽんこっちゃん] 幼馴染は俺の専属お口メイド (COMIC 阿吽 2020年10月号) [英訳] [DL版]

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Posted:2021-05-24 16:39
Parent:1916875
Visible:Yes
Language:English  TR
File Size:13.99 MB
Length:32 pages
Favorited:1265 times
Rating:
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Average: 4.60

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Posted on 24 May 2021, 16:39 by:   intorio     PM
Uploader Comment
Chapter 1 of Poncocchan's "My Childhood Friend is my Personal Mouth Maid" from COMIC AUN 2020-10

My 3rd solo project, constructive criticism is appreciated.

After I saw this, I couldn't not do it! It will probably be a while before I get around to the next chapter..

Update: I've added the 8 pages that were missing from the chapter gallery. I thought that ending was kind of abrupt!
Posted on 24 May 2021, 03:33 by:   GO_KENTA     PM
Score +72
Fantastic choice, Poncocchan is one of my all time favorites.
Posted on 24 May 2021, 05:10 by:   drmarioguy     PM
Score +795
>Oh no the Dad is gonna NTR the son here it comes...
>>"Naw Son, enjoy your Maid Onahole"

What a bro 10/10
Posted on 24 May 2021, 05:24 by:   m118w11     PM
Score +53
Looks good, keep it up!
Posted on 24 May 2021, 05:42 by:   blackjack88     PM
Score +519
p5: "there are conditions"
Aww shit...Time for dad to go NTR mode

p6: "I'm not so boorish that I would use my own son's girlfriend"
I-is this real life?
Posted on 24 May 2021, 07:00 by:   ohgodwhai     PM
Score +208
Not using the girl himself? Based dad.
Posted on 24 May 2021, 07:20 by:   nabusco     PM
Score +163
Based dad.
Posted on 24 May 2021, 08:26 by:   Infinite Cutting     PM
Score +52
This is missing quite a lot of pages after page 22, isn't it?
Posted on 24 May 2021, 10:14 by:   Gabs999     PM
Score +275
>Being a maid entails having sex with her master(s)
>Dad chooses not to fuck his son's friend

Hands down one of the best dads in hentai history, absolute bro
Posted on 24 May 2021, 11:24 by:   Danjian     PM
Score +22
There's 8 pages missing after page 22.
Posted on 24 May 2021, 12:53 by:   friedsiopao     PM
Score +9
A few spelling mistakes here and there.
Don't be afraid to look up some manga typesetting guides.
And as pointed out by multiple people already, you're missing quite a few pages. Judging by where the pages cut off, you most likely used this http://e-hentai.fbk.tokyo/index/g/1864244/95b49f4c47/ as the source for the raws, but that gallery particular actually has missing pages.
Looking at the magazine raws and the translations in other languages, this chapter should have a lot more pages.
Posted on 24 May 2021, 13:12 by:   jetpack003     PM
Score +65
Holy shit, give this man a fucking medal.
He deserves to be Father of the Year!
Posted on 24 May 2021, 13:13 by:   darkknightx2     PM
Score +20
Please

@intorio

complete this chapter.
Posted on 24 May 2021, 14:49 by:   BZo1480     PM
Score +47
Holy shit, this dad is an absolute unicorn.
Posted on 24 May 2021, 17:59 by:   ChoriScans     PM
Score +13
Good work!

I have some small advice: Try to stay consistent with how you use punctuation.
Always use three dots when using ellipses (...) It looks better and gets the idea accross, sometimes nips use 2 dots instead of three, you can go ahead and ignore that and use 3 instead.
Same goes for punctuation, I personally limit myself to either !!!, ! or !?. Never !! or ??? (or variations of).

Also, on page http://e-hentai.fbk.tokyo/index/s/038b1a1360/1917326-8
Panel 4, when breaking up sentences like that, it looks better if you end the first sentence with a ...
You can either start the next sentence with ... or just leave it as is.

Oh, don't be afraid to make the font a bit smaller to improve reading flow.
http://e-hentai.fbk.tokyo/index/s/aaafa5e2fc/1917326-11
in panel 5, something light would read a lot better if something wasn't broken up.

Still, the typesetting looks good and the translation is on point (Also, great taste), nice work!
Posted on 24 May 2021, 21:21 by:   LJK321     PM
Score +32
When dad becomes your wingman
Posted on 25 May 2021, 05:07 by:   1nhentai97     PM
Score +14
Thank you for the translation, but I wish people would wait to translate works with full censorship until the tankouban version with minimal censoring is released. It seems no one ever updates their translation once the better version comes out, and we're just stuck with white-outs on otherwise great stories.
Posted on 25 May 2021, 05:22 by:   dgjdgjdgj     PM
Score +21
Vrigin NTR son Dad VS Chad dad, no i'm not so boorish to NTR my son.
Posted on 25 May 2021, 09:59 by:   Soulezz     PM
Score +12
What a breath of fresh air. Lets hope the dad stays that way
Posted on 25 May 2021, 18:27 by:   EvyL     PM
Score +6
Posted on 26 May 2021, 01:35 by:   Death Row     PM
Score +6
Oh wow. This not going NTR after that set up was an extremely pleasant surprise.

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