Apologies for the delay, I had a computer mishap and lost quite a lot of the TL.

4/5/21: Add more of the TL

Thank you for your hard work.

Base +13, avikdas99 +8, firlou -6

Page 49 has a "his" too much and a missing letter.
Page 51 has some wonky wording with "see until when you can resist".
Page 53 should have a "that" after "could it be".

Base +6

What a wicked mother.

Base +7, liberius +6, Ez-Burning +6

The dark blue font is way too hard to read, even against a light background. This might have to do with the black outline making the letters harder to tell apart from each other.

Base +6, ast4 +6

I think my monitor might be too bright, but I'll keep it at the light blue then. Someone told me that's easier to read.

Base +7

Page 95 needs an exclamation mark.
Page 98 has "have are".
"Foetus" is a reoccurring typo.
Page 108 has "you're turned", which should probably be "you've turned". There also feels like a word is missing.

Base +6, Ulfhedinn -6

"Foetus" is, from a quick check on a dictionary site, apparently just a British spelling of fetus.

Base +6, avikdas99 +8, Ulfhedinn +6, qwazman -7

实用的本子

Base +1

I think you can remove the incomplete from the title ;)

Base +7

Page 124 has dropped a "d".
Page 133 has a wrong name.
Page 135 has an "its" when it should be "it".
Page 138 has a wonky period placement.
Page 143 "must" -> "much".
Page 147 has "its" when it should be "it's", twice.
Page 153 dips into present tense for a bit, is that intentional?
Page 163 has an "its"/"it's" mixup.
Page 169 has a wrong name.
Page 173 has a typo "head" when it should be "heat". And one of the lines has the wrong color.
Page 175 needs an additional space.

There are also a lot of pages with an inconsistent pronoun for the hero.

Last edited on 25 May 2021, 13:33.

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hmm, what happened top his Baby he impregnated his Mom with?

sadly for all thee pages she had so little action

Base +8, ViperJet +8

Prequel: http://e-hentai.fbk.tokyo/index/g/1886830/efae058dca/

Base +6