Thanks for translating this. Unfortunately you fell for the newbie trap and used the 1280x resolution resample pages for editing instead of the original raw which is around ~1416 x 2000 for the digital, ~2107 x 3017 for the scan. For gallery viewing, e-hentai downsamples all images to 1280x resolution so if you downloaded the pages without using the original source link, you got the reduced version instead.
Another possibility is that you downloaded the raw from one of the aggregator sites such as NH. These sites only copy galleries from e-hentai at resample quality and thus don't have the original resolution versions available. You shouldn't use these sites as a source for your raws.
Always check that you're using the original raw before you start editing. If you ever see the resolution being 1280x something, then most of the time that means something is wrong and you got the wrong version.
Here's some ways you can download the original full resolution version of any gallery on e-hentai: 1) Torrent download if a torrent is available. Avoid any torrents labeled 1280x though. 2) Click on Archive download and then Download Original Archive. 3) If you prefer to download one page at a time, make sure you download using the Download Original Source link located below each opened image in the gallery.
Will edit this post as I go through Page 5: tho should be "though" Page 7: FLoating should just be "Floating" Page 8: Swap em with "them" Page 9: Yake should be "take" Page 12: Sfx error. Swap glup with "gulp" 16: This is a translation not a rewrite I assume, make min into "minute". Also, Your's bigger should be "Yours IS bigger too" 17: Compared to my sisters breast it is nothing. Did you mean "Compared to your breasts it was nothing." Or is this just an overwhelming fuck up? 32: What happen to the girl from before? Should be "What happened to the girl from before?" Also I just happene to be walking by should be "I just happened to be walking by." 35: Yea should be "Yeah." 40: I can feel it come out. Should be "I can feel it coming out." 42: Just go ahead and enjoy ourselves. Should be either "Let's go ahead and enjoy ourselves." Or "Just go ahead and enjoy yourself." 51: Even though this person won't dive in thr water with me. Should be "Even though this person won't dive in the water with me." Please note these are all JUST the grammatical errors, this is not even taking into account all the horrible lack of punctuation. I would advise getting a proper QC before you try your hand at this again.