English translation

Part 1 in Japanese: http://e-hentai.fbk.tokyo/index/g/859823/e485577118/
Part 2 in Japanese: http://e-hentai.fbk.tokyo/index/g/1070433/ce4d4bfbfa/

Part 1 in English: http://e-hentai.fbk.tokyo/index/g/1625863/ccf8f2b69f/ (you are here)
Part 2 in English:http://e-hentai.fbk.tokyo/index/g/1625216/10869e4dfd/

Base +43, EvaOtaku07 +21, czerkill +10, Lostalgia +9, Monster-Girl Lover +7, traveler101 +6

Thank you for tagging + giving the links to both parts! I've just started translation and I don't know how to tag or anything.

Base +1, coleccionista903 +6, EvaOtaku07 +21, czerkill +10, Lostalgia +9, Monster-Girl Lover +7

Pretty good work for being early on in your efforts.
A couple notes on the editing if I may...

General: The pages should be leveled so that the white you clean the bubbles with matches the white of the existing bubbles
Text gets dangerously close to bubble edges a couple times (pretty minor complaint)
Line breaking looks like it's been done automatically with a drawn text rectangle, most of it turned out fine but a couple points were noticeable
Biggest one for the future: it looks like you haven't edited the highest available resolution of the raw. If you're grabbing the raw off e-hentai, you can click "archive download" and "download original archive" to get the images prior to e-hentai's resampling.

Specifics:
P3 I'm a hard...
hardworker -> hard worker
breakfawt -> breakfast

P7 Nn... your...
tastey -> tasty

P9 I can feel it...
Line breaking could be better here, avoid splitting words especially not on a morpheme

P11 Heheh...
Line breaking could be better here

P15
It's so hot...
pregnate -> pregnant
to be -> to get

P16
Are we doing it...
Line breaking could be better here

I want to re-iterate that this good stuff for an early attempt. There are relatively few errors, and not really any more than most editors would make without someone on QC. Keep up the good work.

Base +9, Refyrsen +10