Raw by 娱乐城炸了: http://e-hentai.fbk.tokyo/index/g/1007887/40fa6f7697/
Translated by allenallenallen333
Edited by allenallenallen333

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So I saw this gallery: http://e-hentai.fbk.tokyo/index/g/1143895/f58621e09f/
And found that Moketa's work got translated into English... badly.
The title is wrong. The guy's name is wrong.
If you can't translate, then don't do translation bounties, Black_Viper.

So at the cost of having a lab due on Monday and a paper due on Tuesday, I went ahead and translated this.
Because it's Moketa's work, it deserves my undivided attention.

Thanks for the alternative "fixed" translation, Hinagiku Katsura :)

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I just checked the first few pages of both translations. Hinagiku Katsura is right. The other one is way off the mark.

There are odd points in this one too, but it's much closer.
pg2. 今日も行っていいー？ -> became "Did you have a nice day?" when she's asking if she can come over.

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Hmm, knew the translation was a bit liberal in places, but I guess it was more liberal than I thought.
(To be fair, for the english title the translator wanted to go with something less literal since it doesn't translate well, which is fine imo.)

That thing with the names clears things up though. Was told that Akihito was his nickname as he introduced himself as Akai. This makes more sense :P

Nice to get a more accurate translation... Now for all the other untranslated works :3 (Do it!)

P.S. p.2 - conscience

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Extremely adorable :)

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> All the other untranslated Moketa? There are quite a few though. I still have my lab and paper... D:
You know you want to :^)

IIRC the 2 per month limit doesn't count replacements for legit reasons. Don't quote me on that though... Edit: Should be fine

Last edited on 21 November 2017, 19:03 UTC.

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Thanks for the translation, no wonder I found something was off when I read it yesterday.

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Thanks for these translations. When I think about how I just accepted the other one without realizing how off some of the translations could be, it makes me shudder. Especially for great works such as these.

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Thank you for this ! On the other translation the guy is talking about breaking up with the girl at the bottom of page 2 so I thought he was an asshole, but now that you corrected it, it's much nicer.

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今日も行っていい -- is basically means "Is today good to go/do it?"
Japanese is an example high context language. Without experience or attention to detail, one would be left confused.

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Doesnt that mo particle, imply that she is asking for "today also"?
So wouldnt it be: is it good if we try it today too?

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I keep thinking these two are the same from http://e-hentai.fbk.tokyo/index/g/1138896/46002d993d/
However their names and the hair styles are a bit different
Thanks for the alternate yet more accurate translation

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After seeing her face on the first page i thought: "That is a face/mouth that will have at least 1 dick in bewteen those kawaii little fangs there by the end of the story/manga"
But after reading this wonderous work i was like : "That mouth s still virgin... virgin cute fang mouths rules"
And so i gave it top notch notes.
(Also because it is made by Moketa... and i love moketa females... lolis overall... :P)

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Hey Hinagiku, sorry to see you were so disappointed in my translation. I confess it was my first one ever, and I am still in the process of learning Japanese. I know that your biggest gripe is with the Title being wrong, and I'd like to assure you that I did at first come to the same title you did "Mikan-chan is Familiar with Sex", however, after talking it over with lacus1 we decided not to go with that name and try to come up with a more fitting one. As for mistranslating the guy's name, it was just a misunderstanding of how "hito" was being used here. Knowing that "hito" generally refers to the word person or man, I had thought she was shortening his name as a sort of nickname. Clearly in retrospect, this was a misjudgement on my part due to sheer inexperience.

Then of course there's the fact that the translation on its own felt very stiff in some parts. I still stand by that, some of the dialog here feels very stiff when directly translated, whereas it's clearly supposed to be more freeflowing between both characters. I absolutely did take some liberties in certain places, but not enough that it should have affected the actual intention of the characters. It seems my misunderstanding of certain contexts might have lead to some mistranslations however, which was never my intent. As an example, in page 2 I had thought he was saying that he might have to break up with her today, when instead he was saying that something has to happen today. I had thought that the thing to happen was him making a decision on the relationship, not him hoping she'd try something.

That being said, I wasn't attempting to string anyone along here, I made it very clear that this was my first time translating anything at the time of submission, and lacus1 was very understanding of that. I apologize if my translation offended you in some way, but we all have to start somewhere. All that aside, good job on your translation.

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Uh, can't we all just fap in peace and dicuss translations civiy?
Really, I don't see a need fir the condescending tone. I enjoy this one better, but I think it'd be better if we could discuss translations without a high horse.
Of course in this case neither side was really aggressive, and this comments section is shockingly informative and nice, but there's been plenty of translation beefs I'm seeing, outside and inside e-h, so I just wanted to throw my personal two cents in the pool.

Eh, have a nice day, reader of this word salad, and happy fapping.

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Well that escalated quicker than I thought it would

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@Hinagiku
No worries mate, apology totally accepted. I know your heart was in the right place, I'm sure I'd feel the same way if someone butchered one of my favorite artist's works. As anyone who has ever attempted to translate Japanese knows, it's an exceptional complex language that can easily be mistranslated, and I'm glad you can understand where I was coming from. Glad to see some good could come out of this in the way of you getting back into translating, you seem to have a real knack for it. Best of luck out there.

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@HinagikuKatsura Please finish up the Hundred Days it really good and i want to know what happen next please i beg you T-T

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